The aroma of
the area hit me as soon as I stepped into the surroundings. The air had a sweet
smell of burnt sugar followed by the smell of baked confections from the oven,
prominent even from the entrance. The bakery was barren of life which most
people would find strange if they didn't frequent the place and the only thing
to keep me company was the cold, glass display right in the center of
everything. The tranquility of the place was soon disturbed, however, when a
gray feline stalked out from the back of the counter seemingly out of nowhere,
and my eyes followed him to where he jumped on top of the only lone table of
the entire store. His eyes glared back onto mines as I continue staring at him
for a few seconds and I got the distinct feeling of a guard dog emitting from
his tiny body daring me to do anything suspicious.
Eventually, I turned my attention to what I came here for, but not
before going over to the cat and stroking his dusty looking fur. His stiff back
relaxed under my touch and his back arched as if gliding my hand to where he
wanted it to be. I took a moment to appreciate how soft his fur felt and the
different shades of gray that he had. It was quite relaxing and I would have spent
more time if my stomach didn't start grumbling about the lack of substance that
it didn't have all day. I went back to the display case where a line of bread,
pastries, and cakes greeted me. My mouth drooled at the sight, but I patiently
waited for the elderly woman to emerge from the back like she always does. I
didn't have to wait long though when she appeared and the look of surprise
suddenly appeared on her face when she saw me. I quickly ordered what I wanted: some cookies and a milk tea and left the bakery with a white plastic bag in hand.
The dominant impression of this writing piece was tranquility. Within the post the author demonstrates this impression by using a calming tone. She uses the phrase "sweet smell of burnt sugar" to depict to the reader the tranquil scenery of the bakery. Additionally, she describes the moment of her petting the cat to be relaxing as she explains how the cat moved around her hand to be caressed. She uses a vivid imagery when claiming the cat's back movement once her hand touched his body. This helps the reader imagine the calming connection between her and the cat. She closes her descriptive essay with a nice and sweet ending of her leaving the place with cookies and milk tea. In overall, the calming tone and vivid imagery of her with the cat created a dominant impression of peacefulness and tranquility.
ReplyDeleteThe dominant impression of this writing was serene. The use of diction such as, "The air had a sweet smell of burnt sugar followed by the smell of baked confections from the oven, prominent even from the entrance." Gave off a very calm soothing tone and was very pleasing to read. Not only that but the adjectives you used such as soft and relaxing help give off a calm atmosphere while reading and the items the person bought helps contribute to the dominant impression because milk tea and cookies are stuff you would eat to enjoy and relax. Overall, i really enjoyed reading this passage.
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